1- The introduction paragraph is too general and wide. 2- examples of Indian and Japanese examples must be supported by ref. academic writing must be supported by ref. 3-Most of your references have no relevance to the fact cited e.g vijaraman on GDPR what is the relevance! revise-as I have just explained this in class. 4.answer are too general and you must to your experience and support with ref. 5-3e- is insufficient to attract marks- expand 6- check the font size and spacing and alignment in your answer. 7- work is too general and advised to revise and improve.